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Wednesday, 14 June 2017

Here is my six sentance story

Once upon a time there was a cat named Tom and a mouse named Jerry. Tom had nowhere to lived so he decided to live  in a garbage can. but when he arrived there he met a mouse that was called Jerry. Jerry was annoying because he always disturbed Tom by rustling in the garbage can. Jerry was driving Tom mad because  he did not get any sleep. Tom thought he had only one thing to do, so when Jerry was rustling in the garbage can tom jumped at him and ended his life by eating him!!
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5 comments:

  1. Anonymous14 June 2017 at 17:25

    hi casey i like the way you gave your story coluor and to give advice you probaly give colours we can see . ;)

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  2. Anonymous6 July 2017 at 16:36

    Wow casey.That's a very interesting story about tom and jerry.Maybe next time give some colour that we can see.But good try
    Keisha room 9

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  3. Anonymous7 July 2017 at 02:17

    Hi casey I liked how you thought about writing about tom and jerry.
    I love the colours you put in your story and maybe next time you write a story you could put more detail in your next story.
    by Deacon

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  4. Anonymous22 August 2017 at 19:45

    hi casey, i like how you did the words colorful but maybe make the yellow a different color so we can see it a bit better.

    by Tagiria and Sehansa

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  5. Anonymous26 September 2017 at 18:05

    Hi casey i like your story so much.
    Next time you could try and make the colures so we can read your story.

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